Kayta

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NAME: Kayta

AGE: 15

OCCUPATION: Apprentice Crafter

GENDER & SEXUALITY: Female; Straight

LIKES: Dragons, silence, wooded areas, crafting, any kind of meat and hunting

DISLIKES: Raiders, being in an extremely crowded area, hurt dragons and no food

STRENGTHS: Agile, used to being in wooded areas, bow hunter, gifted musician

WEAKNESSES: Shy, will do anything for dragons, not extremely skilled with fighting, and her family

FEARS: Spiders, when a dragon dies because she didn't help it, being lost, and most of all, losing her pipe

AMBITIONS: To perfect her hand-to-hand combat skills, to become friends with every single type of dragon, learn to speak Dragonese and to eventually train a White Fear or Stormcutter Dragon

SECRETS: Kayta knows everything from the Book of Dragons, she can almost recite most of it. She also likes to play pipe in a grove in the woods for the wild dragons to hear.

OVERALL PERSONALITY: Kayta is quite shy when I comes to talking to kids her age. She has a good heart and a strong mind but she lacks experience. Kayta  has a strong competitive spirit that will never be tamed. She also can craft interesting dragon equipment, along with improving dragon saddles to how she likes them. She is a gifted musician on the pipe which her mother gave her. Her mother taught her most of the songs and notes she know today, even if she does occasionally make her own kind of music. Even though she seems to be a softie, what really makes her tick is when people underestimate her skills and abilities. But through all of that her comfort zone is relatively wide but when it comes to dealing with dragons, she will do anything, even step out of her comfort zone! 

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION: Short, muscularly built, long black hair always in a braid, she wears black wool pants with a grey long sleeved tunic, green eyes, sarcastic look on her face, if it is too cold she has a brown parka that she can wear, she also has a cloud shaped birth mark at the base of her neck

HISTORY: Kayta has always lived near Berk but never on the mainland. Her family was just scared of moving because they had lived there all their life. There they trained Kayta in archery because she hunted for them. Her family really wasn't fussy when it came to food. When Kayta's family eventually moved, there was not much use for Kayta's bow anymore, as the village shared their food. She now uses the skill she learned in fighting more often than hunting. When they moved up to the mainland, Kayta's mother gave her a pipe for her 7th birthday. Her mother taught her how to play, as Kayta insisted on that very moment that she must learn. From that, Kayta learned an ability with dragons. When she plays pipe for them, they get lulled to sleep or like to stop and listen. Her crafting skills though started at a younger age. When she would go outside and explore her surroundings, she would bring stuff back. Her parents were most impressed when she weaved a basket out of hay. Kayta replied that when she just tried to braid the hay, she just wanted to put them together so they wouldn't`t get lost. After a year her father let her shadow a real crafter and learn how to do more crafting. She was skilled and had many ideas, even if they weren't the most realistic.

WEAPON OF CHOICE: Long Bow

FIGHTING STYLE: Distance long bow attacks with the occasional dagger hand-to-hand combat.

KEYWORD HIDDEN IN RULES: ********************

CBOX NAME: spirit311

[Redkitebait]

Hi there, welcome to Berk'sDragons!

You're missing some parts of the application, so before I can review it, could you add your OOC/cbox name and Keyword please?

[Cym]

Alright I fixed all your technical errors (format and spelling). I'll work on a proper review for you now.

[Redkitebait]

Your app is intersting, but there are a few inconsistencies we're going to need to iron out!

First of all, chocolate and jeans weren't around in the viking period. Though rumours that VIkings visited america, they visited places like newfoundland and places like that. Cocoa beans come from south america and wasn't developed into chocolate until wayyy later. Jeans also, is a recent invention. Vikings would not have these.

Remember it's cold on Berk! Just a t-shirt isn't going to be very good in climates like that!

You're missing one dislike, two more fears, one ambition and one extra secret.

Your history is very strange. What reason did the Nightmares have for attacking the village - and asking for the girl? Nightmares are dangerous, aggressive beasts. At the age of four, she would have easily been killed by them. But why did they want her in the first place, if the only thing they do is be nasty to her? I feel like the only reason Nightmares would enjoy a fair maiden, especially a four year old - would be for dragon food. How could she survive that? At her age as well? It's very confusing. How did she get to Berk? Something like this would never happen on Berk, after all. So either I need this majorly fixed to make sense, or changing entirely.

Also, if she was raised by dragons, how would she acquire skills such as archery, or feel uncomfortable in crowds, when after being kidnapped by dragons, some human company would naturally be something she would desire?

Did she train a Boneafur? Boneafurs are a rare dragon, which means you need 150 IC posts to be able to use one as your own, in RP, even in history. Also Boneafurs, if you had read the description, have vestigial wings, thus they cannot fly.

There's quite a bit that needs fixing, but don't lose heart! I'm sure together we can make this app really great! Let me know when you've made changes!

[Redkitebait]

It looks a lot better now! But there's still a few of things that may need adding/fixing, mostly additions, though xD

As a suggestion for the occupation - she may not have a job, but if they've been given a place to stay to escape bad dragons, I think your character could be a student in dragon training Like in the films, all the kids do lessons that usually end up hilariously failing ^^ Except they learn concepts of dragon training, and things like that. Of course you don't have to, but it's just a suggestion

You're missing one more fear and weakness!
I think you should put in the strengths that she's a gifted musician And maybe explain how she came to learning that instrument in the history?

I think your personality needs beefing up a bit. Does she have any interesting quirks? What makes her tick? What makes her angry, or makes her step out of her comfort zone? How does stuff in her history make her who she is today?

Being born fluent dragonese seems rather unrealistic. Their parents would teach her the common tongue before considering another language. And you said that where they come from was not friendly with dragons, so why the need to communicate with them until they came to Berk? Unless this was planned? Even so, Dragonese is a language that would have to be learnt. Of course, some people can pick up new languages better than others, and kids in particular can learn new languages easier than adults.

But of course - if her parents don't know dragonese, who will teach it to her? If she arrives on Berk at 15, she'd have to start learning at that age, in theory, wouldn't she? Also after coming from a land that doesn't like dragons, she might not be too accepting of dragons at first, y'know? She would have to re-learn that dragons are friendly, which, if it's been engrained in her childhood, might be a tad difficult

I think that's all I have to say this time around I'm happy to help discuss things with you, don't hesitate to ask stuff in the cbox, too!

[Redkitebait]

Eveything looks alright here I don't see any issues - accepted!

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